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Let’s face it. Very few of us are natural-born writers. That is, very few of us are perfect at what we do. As writers, we become attached to what we write. We fall in love with our characters because we spend countless hours creating them and adding that dimension of reality that’s needed to make readers like (or hate) them, too. We love our settings and the descriptions of them. Many of us love everything about our stories.

Because of that, the revision process can be pretty daunting. And by “pretty,” I mean “so frightening that we don’t want to bother.” That last part, the “not bothering,” is detrimental to any writing career. Revision is an integral part of writing because there is always room for improvement. Always. “Revision” is a big word. It encompasses a lot. A revision can be something small like a few lines or one chapter to half of your book or even a complete overhaul on a novel. Regardless of how big your revision is, it needs to be done. Period.

Because we’re not perfect, in many cases a revision is huge. It’s not uncommon for an entire storyline–that is, an entire novel–to be overhauled. This is where things get really scary. When a story needs to be gutted, we have to cut scenes, lines, and much more that we love. Please believe that it’s a regular occurrence. You’re not the only one removing favorite lines or killing of characters. We’ve all done it. We’ll all do it some more in the future. If you’re ever on the verge of tears over losing a piece of your novel or story that you love, remember this:

The things you cut will almost always make a reappearance. While something may not fit where it is right now, the perfect, scene or chapter will come long and the fit will be perfect. You’ll only have to part with your loves for a little while.

See? Things aren’t so bad now, are they? Revisions are hard. Large revisions are even harder. But you can do them. And you will do them. Why? Because you’re a writer, and revising is what writers do.

Happy Writing,

I think I said I’d post this a week ago, but it didn’t happen. Apologies. Things came up, you know. Anyway…

I originally posted this story way back at the beginning of October when my first short story workshop was approaching. Going into that workshop, I wasn’t sure what I thought of the story. When I left the class, I never wanted to touch the story again, mostly because it didn’t have the effect on my classmates that I thought it would. I wanted to bypass the “placing-the-story-in-a-drawer-and-leaving-it-sit” stage and shred the paper copies and delete the file from my MacBook.

This wasn’t possible, though, because as my luck would have it, the story needed to be substantially revised and included as part of the final portfolio for the end of the class.

I put the revisions off as long as possible, picking the story up again two weeks from the day it was due (December 7th). I marked the paper copy up so much, I nearly went through an entire red gel pen. The end result was a bit more cohesive and understandable than the first draft. It, along with the revision of another story, was enough to get me an A in the course.

In any case, if you’re interested in reading the new version, click on. And as always, feedback is appreciated.

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It’s been a few weeks since I’ve written this weekly theme, but things have come up (school projects, vacation, NaNoWriMo) that have kept me from it. Anyway, here we are—back at “WIP Wednesday”—so let’s get to it, shall we? First, a list of what I’ve been doing (while not writing these posts).

Recent Projects/What I’ve Been Doing:

  • Project #1: The short story titled “Field Tests & Psychopathic Tendencies.” This was written for my second workshop date back on the ninth of this month. It’s written through the point of view of Andrew, the school shooting suspect in my novel “Forward Together.” The first draft was much less stellar than I thought it would be.
  • Project #2: My NaNoWriMo novel. This was my first year participating, and I managed to get to 50,801 words ten days before I needed to. The novel isn’t done, but I plan to finish it within the next year for sure. The first draft is extremely rough and will need substantive edits, I’m guessing. The point, though, is that I did it. I wrote over 50k words in a month. It’s a great feeling.

What’s Coming Up:

  • I have right around two weeks until my final portfolios are due, and there’s plenty to be done. The aforementioned short story needs to be substantially revised, as does the story titled “Midnight Marquee.” I began editing/marking up the latter before class last night and am hoping to have at least one of them completely revised by the time I get back from Thanksgiving with the family.
  • My final journalism paper is due the day before the short stories. I’m writing on Twitter and journalism, so it should be interesting. Most of the research is done, and I’d like to at least have an outline drawn up by the time I get back.

Such lofty goals, especially around Thanksgiving, but things need to get done! The end of the semester is always a whirlwind. Whew! What are the rest of you up to?

Happy Writing!

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Welcome back for another installment of “WiP Wednesday” here at A Novel Pursuit! Today’s post will be a bit random, as I’ve has a busy couple of weeks (and I missed posting this last week). So, without further ado, here we go!

  • Short Story Workshop #1: My first short story workshop went well. The story I used (Midnight Marquee) apparently runs in the fantasy realm. I’ve never written fantasy before, so I found this interesting. I will admit, though, that I didn’t walk away from this workshop as excited as I have the others. I’m not sure if it’s because I don’t care about this story as much, or because I’m not interested in revising it (which I have to do as part of my final portfolio for the class). For now, I’m leaving sit for a while. I’ll tackle it again in November sometime.
  • Writing Contests, Etc: As I mentioned in an entry yesterday, I entered a 10,000-word excerpt from my novel “Forward Together” in the William Richey Fiction Contest sponsored by Yemassee Journal at the University of South Carolina. If you’re interested in learning more about it, read the linked entry for details and a link to the website. NaNoWriMo is coming up quickly. This is my first year of participation and I’m really looking forward to it. I wrote a post about this last week, and you can read about my plans for it here.
  • Current Novel Progress: Sadly, I’ve done nothing but a little bit of editing. I’ve been so busy with things for my current classes that I’ve barely had time to sleep, let alone work on my novel. I’m still mulling over chapter seven and whether I want to trash it or not. I know it needs major work, but I’m still struggling with how I can make it stronger. I need to read through all of what I have so far, as I noticed a few days ago that there are a few items that don’t add up. They’re little things, thankfully, but I’d like to get them fixed as soon as possible.
  • Short Story Workshop #2: This is coming up quickly as well. I have two weeks to come up with a new story (or revise an older piece from class). I’ve got a few ideas, and since I’ll be spending a few days in a hotel room in Spokane next week, I’m hoping to get something down on paper then. I’d like to have it started before then, actually, so we’ll see how things go.
  • Author Panel: Tonight I have an author panel to attend at Mt. Mary. It’s required by my advisor/short story workshop professor as part of class. These panels always tend to be pretty interesting, so I’m looking forward to this one.

That pretty much encompasses my last two weeks. My prioritization skills have gotten a bit better, and I even managed to get my entire journalism midterm written in one day (and a week early). Next Tuesday, I’m going to Washington for a week, but no worries—I’ll have my laptop and will still be posting blog entries!

Happy writing!

One of my current professors (who is also my graduate advisor) has been handing this out in every one of her classes. I’ve had her for three now and always keep at least one copy in my notebooks. It’s an essay by Jeremiah Chamberlain titled “Workshop is Not for You” and is an intriguing read from The Glimmer Train Press, which is why I’m sharing it here. I’d love to hear your comments on it!

“Workshop is Not for You” by Jeremiah Chamberlain

Whenever my students complain about workshop, their gripes invariably have to do with issues os reciprocity. Or, rather, lack thereof—they have spent a great deal of time carefully reading and writing thoughtful commets on the work of their peers, only to receive the vaguest feedback in return. They are angry because they feel that workshop is a social contract. Specifically, one predicated on The Golden Rule: Do Unto Others As You Would Have Them Do To You. They’ve spent months “putting in their time” writing critiques and commentary with the understanding that the “payoff” for this diligence would be receiving the same level of attention to and suggestions for their work. Sometimes they are so angry about this violation of community trust that they can barely resist naming names. And even if they are mature enough to look past the issues of betrayal and fairness, there is still the practical matter of lacking direction for their revisions. So they come to me and seek retribution. Justice.

Needless to say, they aren’t pleased when I tell them it doesn’t matter. “Then what’s the point?” they ask. To them, this is the whole bargain—you read someone else’s work so they’ll read yours.

“The point of workshop is to make you a better writer.”

“What’s what I mean,” they reply. (They think I’ve misunderstood them.) “How am I supposed to get better if I don’t know what’s wrong with my writing?”

“You become a strong writer by writing critiques, not reading them,” I say. Being forced to analyze the effectiveness of other writers’ stories and to then provide them with clear, concise, specific suggestions for improvement will do more to develop a writer’s craft than almost anything else. Through this process writers develop a stronger objectivity about their own work, sharpen their critical thinking skills, and hone their language. A writer can’t always recognize flat dialogue or abrupt scenes or uneven pacing in her own work, but she can sure as hell see it in someone else’s. And the more adept she becomes at identifying it elsewhere, the more easily that skill becomes adapted to her own writing—it becomes second nature.

At this point in the conversation, most students will begrudgingly admit that commenting on the work of others has benefits for their own writing. But they will still grumble that writing critiques feels like busywork, that the same task could be accomplished by reading the work of their peers and then simply discussing it in the open forum of the class (after all, part of their complaint—whether voiced or not—has to do with the amount of time they spent on the other person’s writing). What I try to explain, however, is that the effort required to articulate why and how the components of a story are working will not only force them to think more deeply about their understanding of the story’s central concerns, but might also challenge their initial reading of the piece. This takes time.

Now, I know it’s not much of a consolation to tell ourselves “They’re only hurting themselves” when we don’t receive the thoughtful feedback we’d hoped for on our work. Nor am I arguing that constructive criticism isn’t helpful; there are real benefits to having our stories read closely by our peers. After all, simply understanding the physics of force, inertia, and angle of impact that govern the game of pool doesn’t necessarily mean I’ll be able to sink the ball when I lean over the felt with my cue; it takes years of practice before these skills become engrained, and even then it still takes a mixture of focus, concentration, and luck to pull off a difficult bank shot. So having someone who can comment on our form, our follow-through, even our choice of shots as we learn can be tremendously helpful and instructive.

But at the same time, by mistakenly believing that the most beneficial aspect of the workshop experience in terms of our artistic development is what takes places when it’s “our day” to have our writing critiqued, we do ourselves—and our work— an enormous disservice. Understanding, instead, that one of the best opportunities for personal growth as an author comes from the sustained, close reading and articulate analysis of someone else’s writing will have the effect of shifting the workshop model from one of social contracts, fairness, and duty to that of true learning and mutual respect. More importantly, we might comes to realize that the most selfish thing we can do for our own work is to be altruistic. Perhaps that’s the point.

[Jeremiah Chamberlain lives in Ann Arbor, where he teaches at the University of Michigan. His writing has appeared or is forthcoming in The New York Times Book Review, Poets & Writers, The Michigan Quarterly Review, and Fiction Writers Review, as well as online exclusives for Granta and The Virginia Quarterly Review. His short fiction is the recipient of a Pushcart Prize Special Mention, and has been twice nominated for Best New American Voices. He is also the associate editor of Fiction Writers Review.]

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Welcome back for another installment of the weekly theme I like to call “WIP Wednesday,” in which I report on the general progress of my own writing. I invite you to adopt this theme on your own blog or if you feel so inclined, share your own progress in the comments. Please bear with me over the next couple of weeks as I find an appropriate structure for these posts.

What I’m Doing (Overall):

  • I’ve started a short story of sorts for class. I have a complete story within the three pages I have written—something I’ve never done before. Up until this point all of my “short stories” were far too long and never had a real ending. As it stands, this story is written in first person. For class in two weeks, it needs to be rewritten through the point of view of another character in the story. That will be a bus driver (because he is the other character in my story).
  • It’s unclear whether or not I’ll use this story for my first workshop on October 12th. I would like to, but am unsure of how to change it so it’s not the same as it is now. I may write something entirely different. A friend also suggested rewriting it through the point of view of the killer in my novel, which I find intriguing. We’ll see. In any case, I’d like to use this piece in my novel somewhere.
  • My workshop dates for my Research & Short Story class are set. The first is October 12th; the second is November 9th. I’m very much looking forward to both of them.

Where I’m At (Novel-Wise):

  • Chapter seven is proving to be a bit harder to revise than I originally thought, but I’m slowly working through it. At this point, I’m about halfway through the first set of revisions for the chapter as a whole.
  • Writing an effective interrogation scene between my protagonist and a police detective is proving difficult as well. The interrogation itself seems to be structured okay, but the questions are too weak, I think. There needs to be more of them, too. At this point, I almost feel like I ended the chapter how I did just to be done with it. Writing should not be this way, and I’m going to remedy it soon, I hope.
  • I’ve begun outlining a few more future chapters. As is the case with many of my outlines, I’m sure they’ll change once I get to those chapters. Having the structure for now, though, is a comforting thing.

[How is your writing coming along? How are you keeping yourself on track? Share in the comments!]

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It’s been a couple of weeks, but I can finally get this theme, a little something I like to call “WIP Wednesday” off the ground. As I mentioned a few weeks ago, I wanted to take a day out of the week to report on the progress of my own writing, novel work or otherwise.

What I’ve Been Doing

The last time I did a substantial amount of work on my novel (or any work at all, rather) was at the beginning of May when I was trying to reach the 40-page limit for the final portfolio of my novel writing class I was taking. Over the past couple of months, I took some steps in what I consider to be the right direction as far as research and outside reading goes.

  • Re-reading “Columbine” by Dave Cullen. The first time I read the entire thing in two days (his portrayal of that entire incident was just so amazingly well done); this time, I’m taking my time, highlighting/sticky-posting things I think may be beneficial in working on my own story. Much of what I’m focusing on with this is character traits. It’s hard to develop a calm, cool, and collected psychopathic killer. The shooters at Columbine are tremendously helpful in that respect. I am not modeling my character after them, really, but taking clues instead. The book is also helpful in that it explains the aftermath of a school shooting tragedy. In that respect, it’s all about world building and any help I can find, I’m grateful for.
  • Researching Post-Traumatic Stress Disorder. I think this is almost a must when writing a story like mine. I’ve always thought tragedy and PTSD run hand-in-hand. Again, thanks to Dave Cullen, I’ve found some great resources on the matter. I’ve done my own research and am waiting to hear back about an “interview request” of sorts with a few Psychology/Counseling professors at UW-Milwaukee and Mount Mary College.
  • Researching Psychopathy. This one is a bit more difficult to deal with. As with anything like this (PTSD included), there are varying level pf degrees and just an incredible amount of information to sift through in general. It’s been fun, though. Mount Mary offers a graduate level course in psychopathology. I’m entertaining the idea of taking it, possibly next summer. This is something that I plan to ask about when/if I hear back about the aforementioned interview requests.
  • Researching Bibliotherapy. I haven’t gotten too far into this just yet. Writing as healing is an interesting subject. I’ve been sifting through the book “Writing as a Way of Healing” by Louise De Salvo. I’ll be reading the entire book (probably twice!), and I recommend it. I’m looking forward to researching this and for a few reasons beyond the scope of my novel.

Where I’m At

This past Sunday, I finally, with encouragement from the #amwriting community on Twitter (I recommend taking a look there. Such wonderful encouragement!) and some other close friends, I tackled the revisions for my six chapters that had been sitting around since the end of May. It wasn’t easy. Revisions never are. A few of the chapters needed little work, which I’m still very happy about. Many of the issues dealt with the passage of time between the shooting and the time the police arrived at my main character’s apartment. It’s something I’ve been struggling with lately, but I think I’ve gotten it to a point that makes more sense and that I can be happy with.

Writing forward. I won’t lie…it scares me. Even though I have basic outlines for future chapters, I still always feel a bit lost. I know it’s all part of the process, but sometimes I think it’s enough to keep me from sitting down to actually write. I’m getting through it, though. If I can force myself to sit down and start writing, after the first page or two, I feel fine.

On Monday, I sat down and finally, for the first time since sometime last spring, met my daily goal of 1,500 words. My goal tends to stretch between 1,000-1,500 words, and I keep it that high because it forces me to work.

I started chapter seven. Right now, it’s sitting at thirteen pages and I have a feeling that I’m nowhere near being done with it. At the very least, I expect it to run another five pages, which will make it the longest chapter I have thus far. I’ve already marked areas that need work. I’m excited to get back into this.

Progress.
Finally.